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Engineer
Name: Joshua Matthews 
College Attending: University of Michigan

 

The best essay I have ever written was one of my college application essays into the college of my dreams, the University of Michigan. I had to describe my “interests and aspirations” in engineering, as well as answer the question, “What experiences have influenced you?”  My essay helped me become accepted into the university as well as qualified me for an amazing scholarship.  I am currently a freshman at the University of Michigan and although my engineering program is difficult and challenging, I am loving every single minute of it!

 

Here is my essay in its original form:

I can still remember the first time I ever saw the word engineer. It was eighth grade, and I was taking my first career placement test. Up until that point all I had ever thought about being was a pilot. My family was spread out over the country, and flying was something I did at least four times a year. I loved flying. I loved airplanes. I was sure that pilot would be the first result I would get, so you can imagine my surprise when my top five careers had a word in them I only knew to be a train driver, and pilot was way down the list at about 20th. After looking into it more and realizing just what an engineer did, however, I realized just how much I liked the idea of designing new technologies that people would use every day. Then I found out there was a career out there that combined just that and my original goal: aerospace engineer. I found that working to invent and innovate jets and helicopters was a much more desirable career choice to me than just flying the planes someone else had made. To me, being an engineer is about doing your part to help create a better, more advanced society for all humanity to live in. There’s nothing I would rather do with my life than play even the tiniest of roles in helping to further advance our world into the dreams of science fiction.

Comments (114)
  • Anonymous
    :D
  • Anonymous
    Awesome!
  • Anonymous  - Great!
    :D :D :D
  • Monica Matthews  - That's my boy!
    Good luck Josh!! Love you!!! :love:
  • Anonymous  - Great Essay
    :D
  • Anonymous
    Your enthusiasm and passion for learning is contagious, Josh. Wishing you only the best.
  • Wendy Smith
    :D Great Job Joshua!!! Keep up the good work!!!
  • Brian Derowski  - Brian Derowski, former science teacher
    :0 Josh! Excellent essay. See...writing all of those science offprint essays you loved so much in high school paid off!
    Wishing you the best. D
  • Paula Kasper
    :D Good Luck Josh. Continuing to wish you nothing but the best> :D
  • Lorraine Bloink St. Edward  - Essay
    Great essay Josh! I know you will achieve all your dreams and goals!
  • Anonymous
    Great story, best of luck with everything
  • Mary Romero  - engineer
    :D :D :D Josh, what a great essay! We love you. Good luck.
  • Mrs. Becker  - Go St. Ed's Alumni!
    Josh,

    Although I was not your principal when you attended St. Ed's, from what I hear, you have always been an outstanding student and excellent role model of our Catholic Christian Faith.

    May God Bless you in all of you have done, all you are doing and in all you will become.

    From,

    Mrs. Becker
    Principal St. Edward on-the-Lake Elementary

    Go Josh- Former Laker!
  • Carrie Romero
    :D Very nice. Good luck!
  • Rachel Satterwhite  - Great job
    :D Great job! I remember feeling that way watching Star Trek. Keep up the great work.
  • Susan Kraus  - Excellent Essay!
    Nicely done!
  • Anonymous
    very inspiring :)
  • Laura Somogy  - Great Job Josh
    Dear Josh,
    I am so glad to hear that you are achieving your life's dreams. May God continiously bless you and hold you in all that you do.
    Laura Somogy :D
    St. Edward Catholic School Volunteer librarian
  • Annemarie Kautz
    Great job. Keep up the good work! :D :D
  • Kelli Reynolds  - Great!!!
    Hi Josh...i'm a St. Edwards Mom and friends with your Mom. I just wanted you to know that she brags about you all the time and now that I have read your essay, I think she deserves that right!! Keep up the excellent work...you are going places!! God Bless you!!
  • Susan Romero
    :D Great essay Josh. Best of luck!
  • Kirsten Cahill  - Congratulations on following your dreams!
    Hi Josh,

    What a great essay! You are so fortunate to have found a career path that combines your passions and your abilities. Half the battle for most folks is deciding what they want to be. Getting there is so much easier if you're excited about your goal. Can't wait to hear about your successes!

    Hugs,

    Kirsten :D
  • Heidi Strash
    Josh You rock!!!
    We are all so proud of you. You are an inspiration!!!
    Love, The Strash Family :0
  • brian derowski  - Good job
    :D I am trying to rate you but do not see the "rate" button your mom says appears at top of screen. Keep up the good work Josh.
    D
  • Monica Matthews  - "Rate" has changed to "Vote"!
    Interesting! Now Josh has a solid 5 star rating! Keep on voting people! Thanks so much!!!! Have I mentioned that Josh got all A's at his first semester at U of M? WOOHOO!!!! :love:
  • SPL  - Your Passion for Engineering
    Your passion shines through. You will make the world a better place because of it.
  • Margaret  - Way to go
    :0 Engineers are very important in society and it sounds like you will be a great one. Very well written and thought out clearly.
  • Kerhoulas  - ring
    you are well on your way to getting the iron ring Josh :D
  • Pauline Nofs  - Reach for the stars!
    :D Way to go, Josh! You can achieve anything you put your mind to! May God Bless you!
  • Stephen J. Romero
    Well done Josh! Keep up your focus and the great work. Even though you snubbed your uncle's request to join the ranks of SAE, I guess you'll still have a fun college experience. Go Chippawas, er, uh, I mean GO BLUE!
  • joe gibbons
    Good Essay! Don't be afraid to dream, and never confuse "can't be done" with "hasn't been done." Good luck and may God bless you.
  • Anonymous  - Wow!
    Straight A's at U of M??? AWESOME job Josh!!!
  • Josh Matthews
    Thanks for all the votes and kind words everyone. I think this will get me through my calc 3 exam on wednesday :D
  • Anonymous
    :x :no-comments: :sleep:
  • Anonymous
    You deserve to win this scholarship Josh!! :D
  • Anonymous
    Good luck Josh!
  • Lesa Dolly  - Awesome essay!
    Josh, it is so obvious that you'll go far in life. Congratulations and keep up the good work!
  • Joni Soflin  - Joni Soflin
    Wonderful job! I'm very proud of you.
  • Nielson Family  - Josh -- you've got our vote!
    :(
  • Anonymous
    Keep up the good work, Josh!
  • Mark and Monica Matthews  - Good luck Josh!
    We are SO proud of you!!! :D
  • Tom Romero  - Good luck!
    Great job Josh!
  • Sue  - Great Job Josh
    :D ;) ;))

    You are doing great!!!
  • Nick Matthews
    I hope you win Josh!!
  • Anonymous
    Great!
  • Anonymous  - Great job.
    :D :D :0
  • Nielson Family  - LOVE IT
    :D :D
  • Mrs. Decker
    Great essay Josh! Congratulations!
  • Boyles  - Great Job
    Good luck with contest. It is a great essay.
  • Anonymous
    Great job, Josh!! :D
  • Beth Garcia-praying buddy of y
    I enjoyed reading your essay Josh, your enthusiasm shines through! Keep combining all of your gifts and talents with hard work... and your dreams will be reality. God Bless You Always, Mrs. Garcia
  • Peggy Moylan  - Chemist
    :D
    Good job! Josh, keep up the enthusiasm for science We need more people like you in the field!
  • Anonymous
    :love: Josh I've always observed you from afar. I've secretly gone on your facebook multiple nights and admired my pictures alone in my room. Your face brings back memories of our science class together. I will always cherish all those times you were mean to me. You made me feel alive. :D.

    Love, Mags
  • Josh Matthews
    I apologize to everyone for the spam. I posted the link to this page on my facebook and apparently one of my "friends" thought they'd be funny.

    Thanks again for all the positive feedback and encouragement. GO BLUE!
  • Snakebiter
    Yeah we ain't even talking about your head on your shoulders man ;)
  • Anonymous  - observant parent
    Josh, glad to see you are working on a fufilling future ---- who knows where it will take you? Just like air travel was a springboard to your educational choice --- stay alert to decipher things as they happen.
    Most important, stay kind and considerate of all that you interact with. Good luck
  • Anonymous  - Turn the other cheek....
    ...and ignore. I'm sad that these comments are even allowed on here. Josh, you have a lot to be proud of and your dad and I love you very much. Never forget that. Mom
  • Anonymous  - Thanks for deleting the comments!!
    I am so impressed that the people in charge of this site quickly got rid of those bad comments. Now everyone can ignore my last one, as it no longer makes sense. ;)
  • Julie Rexford  - Great Job
    I know you will do great things!!!
    Keep up the good work!
  • Anonymous
    :D
  • Monica Matthews  - Go Josh!
    LOVE YOU!!! :love:
  • Anonymous
    Great essay!!!!
    :D
  • Anonymous
    Love the essay!!!
  • Tim Matthews
    Good luck Josh!
  • Diane Kraus  - Graphics Specialist
    Love it!!! Great Job! :love:
  • Anonymous
    Go Josh!!! :D
  • Tom Cahill
    Great job Josh. Your great aunt Jinny's dad was a civil engineer and worked on developing the early atomic reactors for ships and submarines with Admiral Rickover when he was in the navy. He later worked on the ground effect of shock waves to make buildings stronger and safer. Her grandfather was also an engineer and worked on construction of the Panama Canal. It's in the family and I know you will be super as an engineer.
  • Tom Cahill
    :D Oops - forgot to vote!
  • Scott Cahill  - In it to win it
    Great job, buddy. You are making the Mathews/Romero/Cahill clan proud :)
  • Monica Matthews  - Thanks everyone!
    It means the world to me that so many people have stepped up to help Josh win this scholarship!! :love:
  • Anonymous  - Great Essay
    :) Great essay
  • Samantha Dooley  - Great Job
    Great Job with the essay! Good luck with the competition! :D
  • Anonymous  - Great career choice!
    You will make an amazing aerospace engineer, Josh!
  • Dee Nielson  - Fantastic!
    Best of luck in winning this scholarship!
  • Anonymous  - You'll go far!
    Josh, you will make a difference in this world. We're very proud of you! :D
  • Anonymous
    Good luck! Very nice job. I love your excitement for your career choice!
  • Nielsonfam  - Woo Hoo
    Win, win, win....
  • Anonymous
    You rock! :D
  • Anonymous
    :D
  • Margie ( Essenmacher) Bhatt  - Friend
    :idea: Best of luck!
  • Monica Matthews
    Thanks for all the votes everyone!! One more week!! :D
  • Anonymous
    Great story. Best of Luck :)
  • Anonymous
    Go Josh!
  • Keith Rivers  - Great job Josh
    What a wonderful essay Josh and my prayer is that all of your goals and dreams come true for you. Stay encouraged :D
  • Brian Derowski  - You are my hero
    :) Remember me when you are rich and famous, Josh!
  • Denise Nielson  - You got my vote!!
    :D Hey Josh -- hope you are enjoying your freshment year and are making great friends -- did you know that your mom & I met our freshmen year of college (many, many, years ago!) and are still great friends today, despite being "geographically challenged". Enjoy! :D :D
  • Denise Nielson  - seriously, you would think I would have learned to
    pardon my typo above!
  • Sharon Bartels (Ms. Decker's  - Good Job Josh!
    Excellent essay, Josh! Keep up the good work!
  • Kim  - Great essay
    You wrote a concise essay that clearly met the requirements requested while adding your own voice. I enjoyed reading your essay and wish you all the best! :D
  • Karen Sills
    Absolutely Inspiring! Best of Luck!
  • Anonymous
    :love:
  • Anonymous
    :D
  • Anonymous
    Hope you win, great paper.
  • Monica Matthews
    I love you Josh! Your dream is getting closer and closer. Keep on working hard!! :love:
  • Anonymous
    :D
  • Anonymous
    Keep up the good work. Study Hard. Oh thats right, it spring break. In that case, play safe.
    :)
  • Lesley  - This is such a well thought out essay
    I know that this is a good one. It is heartfelt. I can tell by reading it. This guy is going to be a great engineer.
  • Denise Nielson  - Great Essay Josh!
    Fantastic -- hope you win the scholarship money Josh!
  • Anonymous
    Josh, you obviously are serious about school and passionate about your major. Good luck! You deserve to win this scholarship.
  • Anonymous
    :love: :love: :love:
  • Anonymous  - Love it!
    Great job! I hope you win!!! :D
  • Anonymous
    Great essay. Best of luck.
  • Lynn Heithoff  - Mrs.
    : Keep up the good work, Josh!
  • KynishaW
    Good...that was good. Shoot for the stars.if you miss you will land on the moon. :D
  • KynishaW
    Good work. Shopot for the stars and if you miss, you will land in the moon.
  • Monica Matthews  - Thanks everyone!!!
    Especially for following the rules and voting only once per computer! I know it's tempting to just click, click, click...but that would probably get Josh's essay DQ'd.

    I love you guys!!!! :love:
  • Ana  - This is cool
    Hi,
    I voted for yours,
    soo vote for mine!

    Thanks
  • Al Romero
    :) Josh,
    You have excellent writing skills! You cxan always count on my vote!
    Best of Luck,
    Grandad Romero
  • Al Romero
    Josh,
    I'm embarassed! I meant to say can always count on my vote.
    Grandad Romero
  • Mrs. Garcia
    Hi Josh, Welcome back after break, you're in the home stretch. Keep up the great work at school! You're in my prayers.
  • Mom
    Praying that your essay will be chosen, Josh. Love you!! :love:
  • Annemarie Kautz  - Praying!
    Good luck, hope you win! :D
  • Anonymous
    Fine job! Hope you win! :D
  • Josh's Mom and Dad
    Thank you so much for everyone who voted for Josh's essay! We are supposed to find out if he wins by March 31st. We'll be sure to let you all know if Josh wins. We really appreciate you guys for taking the time to vote and leave nice comments about Josh's essay. We are so proud of him! He is doing so well at U of M and it's our goal to be able to send him there for all 4 years. We just need to keep finding scholarship opportunities like this! Every little bit helps!! :D
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